Journal 13: Rewrite the TIED-IED paragraph as a more concise, grammatically correct paragraph.
- Does the topic sentence clearly state what the paragraph is about?
- Are there sentences that do not need to be there? Can any sentences be combined?
- Do all the other sentences work to prove the topic?
- Is the entire quote needed, or could it be summed up in the "I" section with less words?
- Can this paragraph be just as strong without using personal pronouns?
- Are there any vague or weak words that you can replace with better ones? ("this" is a horrible word for example. Verbs can often be stronger or more specific.)
I think Gandalf is just like normal wizards. He does not save the day by doing everything because he wanted to give Bilbo and his team a chance to experience difficulties and overcome them, therefore, limiting the time to use his powers. He can understand other languages, has many friends to help and can set things on fire. This is presented in many parts of the story. One of those parts is: "Then he set one alight with bright blue fire, and threw it whizzing down among the circle of wolves. It struck one on the back, and immediately his shaggy coat caught fire, and he was leaping to and from yelping horribly. Then another came and another, one in blue flames, one in red, another in green." (95-96) From this point, we can see, that Gandalf commissions Bilbo with responsibility, saying that their next meeting will depend "on your luck and on your courage and on your sense (128)." Gandalf believes that with training, Bilbo and the Dwarves can finish the job. If Gandalf helped them get through all the difficulties, the journey would be meaningless.
HW: Read Ch. 12 & do Journal 14
Journal 14: Brainstorm three discussion questions and look up the etymology of the name "Arkenstone." What associated meanings do you think Tolkien intended when he named that stone. Please write this journal as a TIED paragraph using a quote from the definition as your EVIDENCE sentence.
